Line By Line

Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
In this Month's Eden Lit Club meeting we learned about First Person Narrative.

First person storytelling- In a first person narrative the narrator is telling the story from their personal perspective. Usually they are recounting a memory or account of a previous happening, though they could also be telling the story in real time. The trick for the author is to remember to use the proper tense and to describe the events as they unfold rather than glossing over important details.
Remember that your audience cannot see, smell, hear or taste what your character is seeing, smelling, hearing or tasting. To be really effective the author must remember that actions should be described in a logical fashion.

We thought it might be fun to have a Month long game of write the next line but stay in first person perspective.
I'll get the show started:
02/13/2012
  • Save 60% on Spooktacular Kits  - 3 item set
  • Wicked Treats - Save 60% on 3 Item Set

    • Eden leather blindfold
    • Flaming amour silicone pearl bunny
    • Eden's glass ben wa balls
    Save 60% on 3 Item Set

    Expires on Oct, 31 at 3am ET Terms

  • Ghost Bride - Save 60% on 3 Item Set

    • Casper
    • Leather strap rider
    • Simple Clamps
    Save 60% on 3 Item Set

    Expires on Oct, 31 at 3am ET Terms

  • Black Magic - Save 60% on 3 Item Set

    • Eden Beaded Clamps
    • Heart Silicone Beads
    • Onyx
    Black Magic - Save 60% on 3 Item Set

    Expires on Oct, 31 at 3am ET Terms

  • Better Price Sale - Save 70%
  • 1
  • 2
  • 3
  • 4
  • 5
All promotions
Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
Quote:
Originally posted by Airen Wolf
In this Month's Eden Lit Club meeting we learned about First Person Narrative.

First person storytelling- In a first person narrative the narrator is telling the story from their personal perspective. Usually they are recounting a memory ... More
It was a bright and sunny day the day I died. I was walking...
02/13/2012
Ansley Ansley
Quote:
Originally posted by Airen Wolf
It was a bright and sunny day the day I died. I was walking...
...through the woods, headed towards a crystal clear stream. There was a bridge up ahead...
02/13/2012
BBW Talks Toys BBW Talks Toys
Quote:
Originally posted by Ansley
...through the woods, headed towards a crystal clear stream. There was a bridge up ahead...
... that looked like it was plucked straight from a fairy tale. It had...
02/13/2012
MimiPhryxus MimiPhryxus
Quote:
Originally posted by BBW Talks Toys
... that looked like it was plucked straight from a fairy tale. It had...
beams made from the roots of living trees that lined the ravine it spanned across. On the other side...
02/13/2012
Woman China Woman China
Quote:
Originally posted by MimiPhryxus
beams made from the roots of living trees that lined the ravine it spanned across. On the other side...
of the bridge was where the leprechauns lived at the end of the rainbow. "There I shall be laid to rest," I thought as I....
02/14/2012
Destri Destri
walked ever closer to the bridge. "I wonder if I will feel any different after I...
02/14/2012
Illusional Illusional
Have been buried. The sun beamed down on me and birds chirped, delighted by my presence. I heard a voice call my name and I...
02/14/2012
Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
Quote:
Originally posted by Illusional
Have been buried. The sun beamed down on me and birds chirped, delighted by my presence. I heard a voice call my name and I...
began to wonder if I was being totally melodramatic in my musings about death. It WAS a bright sunny day, after all! I laughed for sheer joy just before...
02/14/2012
Woman China Woman China
Quote:
Originally posted by Airen Wolf
began to wonder if I was being totally melodramatic in my musings about death. It WAS a bright sunny day, after all! I laughed for sheer joy just before...
a blue bird crapped on my head, stubbed my toe falling over and landing on a vibrator. "Jiminey Crickets!" I screamed grabbing my....
02/14/2012
Jul!a Jul!a
chest as though to keep my heart from beating right out of it. "That was really...
02/14/2012
BBW Talks Toys BBW Talks Toys
Quote:
Originally posted by Jul!a
chest as though to keep my heart from beating right out of it. "That was really...
LOUD! I should put my Hitachi away!" After I do so, I start making my way down the stairs when, all of a sudden...
02/14/2012
Amelia Stone Amelia Stone
As if in a dream. I was pulled from where I was into a shadowed room filled with...
02/14/2012
underHim underHim
Items I had never seen before. Some were long and looked similar to sex toys, but
02/14/2012
PassionateLover2 PassionateLover2
without hesitation and without skipping a beat, I took the bold step and reached out. . .
02/14/2012
Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
OK I am going to call a foul here...this is a first person story but it isn't just a finish the last line! You can't end up with a vibrator that needs electricity while walking over a bridge in a sylvan wood setting! Where did the stairs come from? Where did the room come from? LOL This is a great little flight of fantasy but let's get back to the lesson. Change the story if you want but make sure it makes sense and follows the established story line!

In this incarnation you can write more than one single line but if anyone judges the story to be losing it's cohesion or leaving the first person perspective he/she can cry fould and write a synopsis of the story thus far restarting the process!

Aaaaaaand begin!
02/14/2012
Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
Let's start again!

On the day I died, I was in a beautiful wooded area enjoying the sunny day when a bird crapped on my head and I stumbled. I landed on a vibrator and I remember screaming and clutching at my chest. I stumbled to the water's edge to wash the bird poo off my face and clean up the dirty vibrator when I saw...
02/14/2012
HouseWench HouseWench
a reflection that wasn't mine. I...
02/14/2012
Destri Destri
jumped up, startled to my core. Before me stood a smiling...
02/15/2012
Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
Quote:
Originally posted by Destri
jumped up, startled to my core. Before me stood a smiling...
leprechaun. I was wary because leprechauns have a bad reputation. He looked like a nice sort but you can never be too careful. I was right to be leery because he beckoned me forward just before he...
02/15/2012
Woman China Woman China
wee Airen in all the vivid colours of the rainbow. She snorted, laughing so hard as she bent down whispering in my ear, "...
02/15/2012
Woman China Woman China
Quote:
Originally posted by Woman China
wee Airen in all the vivid colours of the rainbow. She snorted, laughing so hard as she bent down whispering in my ear, "...
LOL!!!! I was going to say leprechaun!!! I shall try again!!!
02/15/2012
Woman China Woman China
Quote:
Originally posted by Airen Wolf
leprechaun. I was wary because leprechauns have a bad reputation. He looked like a nice sort but you can never be too careful. I was right to be leery because he beckoned me forward just before he...
cackled with glee and burst into song. I knew that today I was due to die, but never once did I fathom...
02/15/2012
Destri Destri
that my death would lead me to meeting a leprechaun! I just had to smile at the silly song he sang, but I was still more than a little concerned about this odd turn of events. When his song was over, he...
02/15/2012
PassionateLover2 PassionateLover2
looked into my eyes seeking a sympathetic approval. I hesitated for a moment, but instead reached down to pluck a beautiful flower and...
02/16/2012
Woman China Woman China
watched my vibrator float down the stream. Shrugging my shoulders and tucked the purple flower behind my ear curiously looking at the gasping leprechaun...
02/16/2012
Destri Destri
and wondering why he gasped. His face was turning red, and I was becoming quite concerned for his health! Patting him on the back, I asked, "Are you all right?" He looked into my face and...
02/16/2012
wetone123 wetone123
said "Sorry lass, I'm prone to panic attacks when there is something I'm sent out to say or do that is less than appetizing to me." He sat on a large mushroom that was nearby to catch his breath and calm himself...
02/16/2012
Woman China Woman China
when suddenly there were all sorts of mumbles of "Smurftastic!" and "Smurfaroo what in Smurfination is going on here?" as the mushroom sank closer to the bank of the stream. [italics|This day is just getting weirder and weirder]I couldn't help but...
02/16/2012
Destri Destri
wonder what the hell I had wandered into! The leprechaun jumped up with a look of shock on his face as the mushroom turned around and said, "Do I look like a chair to you?!?" The leprechaun began to...
02/16/2012
  • 1
  • 2
Total posts: 45
Unique posters: 15