#Workshop - June 29th @ 9pm - Grammar Workshop

sexyintexas sexyintexas
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Originally posted by cherryredhead88
I guess you all have a good point with the whole enjoying it the first time thing.

I guess I'm just too much into reviewing, it's almost second nature to me to note certain things as I go, lol.


I know that it is harder ... More
I've just recently started doing it, but I think that it has improved my review a lot.
06/29/2011
cherryredhead88 cherryredhead88
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Originally posted by Kake aka PoeticErotica
Got it! Thanks! I was slightly confused. I didn't even know there was a purpose for an en dash. lol.
Same here! And now I notice them everywhere.

I don't even recall learning about those in my english classes either.

I still get a little bit confused but I try and incorporate them more now that I know what they are for. Lol

You're welcome Alan and Michele
06/29/2011
Jul!a Jul!a
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Originally posted by cherryredhead88
This is a good way to think about what information you would like to add.

I know reviews have a lot of basic things required like size, shape, material, and care, but we can all go above and beyond that with different uses and experiences. ... More
At this point, I've got a really good idea of what I want to cover in each of my reviews, but that's come with the practice of writing so many. I have a little template in my head that goes over materials, flexibility, compatibility with other things, other possible uses, etc.
06/29/2011
Kake aka PoeticErotica Kake aka PoeticErotica
Quote:
Originally posted by cherryredhead88
This is a good way to think about what information you would like to add.

I know reviews have a lot of basic things required like size, shape, material, and care, but we can all go above and beyond that with different uses and experiences. ... More
I like to make a bullet point list of things that I either a) might normally forget and/or b) are particular to the product. I also like to go to the company's website and check out the info they offer as well and if I find any additional info I add that to the list along with stuff like my personal findings (actual size compared to listed size), details on packaging, cleaning & storage info, drag or lack thereof, seams or lack thereof, can it be sterilized?, and any links I find specific to the product (i.e. I might link to my fave water-based lube for a silicone product, or to a link on the g-spot for a g-spot toy, or to fluid-bonding info for toys that can't be sterilized). And so on and so forth. I may not use all this info, as I tend to go overboard, but I like to have it on hand.
06/29/2011
Jul!a Jul!a
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Originally posted by sexyintexas
I've been recently trying to explain things like I am describing it to a blind person, if that makes sense??!!
One of the suggestions I usually give out is to try and explain it to your best friend who has no idea what you're talking about. This works especially well for the standard template that lacks the prompts that might otherwise remind you what you wanted to talk about.
06/29/2011
Jul!a Jul!a
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Originally posted by Petite Valentine
I'm here

I'm one of those people who takes days to write reviews. I don't see how anyone could spit one out in under an hour.
If you've written reviews on a whole bunch of something already, it's not too hard to do
06/29/2011
Kake aka PoeticErotica Kake aka PoeticErotica
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Originally posted by Antipova
I also try to qualitatively describe how things feel---like what makes the Tantus Motion feel so incredible compared with other thrusting dildos. There's a lot more to sex toys than just "it fits" or "it doesn't fit," or ... More
Good call! Almost like writing prose poetry, in a matter of speaking.
06/29/2011
Antipova Antipova
Quote:
Originally posted by cherryredhead88
Same here! And now I notice them everywhere.

I don't even recall learning about those in my english classes either.

I still get a little bit confused but I try and incorporate them more now that I know what they are for. ... More
Yeah, learning about em and en dashes from Selective Sensualist has helped me a lot. I used to completely overuse parentheticals, and then I ran across somebody using dashes in their writing, and I realized I could use them in place of all my parentheses.

SS confirmed that it was an okay thing to do, and she gave me the punctuation to do it right (because I'd just been using hyphens, when I found it on my own).

One of the best things I've learned on Eden!
06/29/2011
sexyintexas sexyintexas
I have a question on the information page. If we recieve a product that is largely different from the info page (size, shape, etc.) do we need to submit a ticket or something?
06/29/2011
Petite Valentine Petite Valentine
This doesn't have much to do with grammar, but I suggest measuring tape (and a scale) because I find the 'official' measurements of many toys are not exact.
06/29/2011
Jul!a Jul!a
Quote:
Originally posted by cherryredhead88
I guess you all have a good point with the whole enjoying it the first time thing.

I guess I'm just too much into reviewing, it's almost second nature to me to note certain things as I go, lol.


I know that it is harder ... More
I mentally take notes all the time. I have to really tone it down while my husband and I are trying out something new or I end up being a giant mood killer, lol.
06/29/2011
Kake aka PoeticErotica Kake aka PoeticErotica
Quote:
Originally posted by Petite Valentine
I'm here

I'm one of those people who takes days to write reviews. I don't see how anyone could spit one out in under an hour.
Same here, longer even on occasion.
06/29/2011
Alan & Michele Alan & Michele
Quote:
Originally posted by cherryredhead88
I guess you all have a good point with the whole enjoying it the first time thing.

I guess I'm just too much into reviewing, it's almost second nature to me to note certain things as I go, lol.


I know that it is harder ... More
It took us some time to get into a groove with writing about toys that we didn't like. We figured out it was easier if we sat back and defined whether the toy really sucked all around, or whether it just didn't work out for us personally. Now the hardest ones for us to write up are those that we feel nothing for either way.
06/29/2011
Wondermom Wondermom
I like to pull out my measuring tape to double check the size to make sure its listed right
06/29/2011
sexyintexas sexyintexas
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Originally posted by Jul!a
One of the suggestions I usually give out is to try and explain it to your best friend who has no idea what you're talking about. This works especially well for the standard template that lacks the prompts that might otherwise remind you what ... More
Noted...I have a sister that I explain things I get to on the phone. Maybe I should note some of the things that I tell her too. She lives out of town and doesn't have a camera phone...sheesh...so it gets pretty descriptive.
06/29/2011
Antipova Antipova
Quote:
Originally posted by Petite Valentine
This doesn't have much to do with grammar, but I suggest measuring tape (and a scale) because I find the 'official' measurements of many toys are not exact.
Oh yeah, I have lost count of how many dildos have sat in my kitchen scale! A good reason to opt for sterilizable toys...
06/29/2011
sexyintexas sexyintexas
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Originally posted by Wondermom
I like to pull out my measuring tape to double check the size to make sure its listed right
I have a sewing tape by my computer.
06/29/2011
Kake aka PoeticErotica Kake aka PoeticErotica
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Originally posted by Wondermom
it usually takes me a few times to warm up to a toy for full enjoyment 9although I haven't tried a hitachi lol)
To be honest, I wouldn't bother. I hate the damn thing. Go with the largest or second largest fairy instead. It's like 70s bush vs. '10s bush. Or porn. Or parties. Etc.
06/29/2011
Alan & Michele Alan & Michele
Quote:
Originally posted by sexyintexas
I have a question on the information page. If we recieve a product that is largely different from the info page (size, shape, etc.) do we need to submit a ticket or something?
Yes, EF appreciates it very much if we do that.
06/29/2011
Antipova Antipova
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Originally posted by Kake aka PoeticErotica
Same here, longer even on occasion.
I'm usually prepping it in my head for 2-5 days, but then when I actually sit down to write it it'll only take an hour or so...

Sometimes. Sometimes I write it over the course of a few days. I wonder if they flow as well, or if someone could pick out a review I wrote in one sitting versus one I started and stopped.
06/29/2011
cherryredhead88 cherryredhead88
Alright we are doing good! Everyone has awesome suggestions so far I'm sure most of you are looking forward to finding ways to overcome that pesky Writer's Block, and OWL has another great resource with ideas!



*Symptom*
You have chosen or been assigned a topic which bores you....

*Possible Cures*
Choose a particular aspect of the topic you are interested in
Talk to your mentor or peers about how you can personalize the review to make it more interesting


*Symptom*

You are anxious about writing the review... (this would work great for video reviews as well)

*Possible Cures*

Focus your energy by rehearsing the task in your head.
Consciously stop the non-productive comments running through your head by replacing them with productive ones.
If you have some "rituals" for writing success (chewing gum, listening to jazz etc.), use them.

*Symptom*
You are so stressed out you can't seem to put a word on the page...

*Possible Cures*

Stretch! If you can't stand up, stretch as many muscle groups as possible while staying seated.

Try tensing and releasing various muscle groups. Starting from your toes, tense up for perhaps five to ten seconds and then let go. Relax and then go on to another muscle group.

Breathe deeply. Close your eyes; then, fill your chest cavity slowly by taking four of five short deep breaths. Hold each breath until it hurts, and then let it out slowly.

Use a calming word or mental image to focus on while relaxing. If you choose a word, be careful not to use an imperative. Don't command yourself to "Calm down!" or "Relax!"

*Symptom*

You're self-conscious about your writing, you may have trouble getting started. So, if you're preoccupied with the idea that you have to write about a subject and feel you probably won't express yourself well...

*Possible Cures*

Talk over the subject with a friend or mentor.

Assure yourself that the first draft doesn't have to be a work of genius, it is something to work with.

Force yourself to write down something, however poorly worded, that approximates your thought (you can revise this later) and go on with the next idea.

Break the task up into steps. Meet the general purpose first, and then flesh out the more specific aspects later.


I do those last two suggestions a lot. Something we learned in school was to keep writing and write ANYTHING you are thinking of to get through writer's block. It still works pretty well for me.
06/29/2011
Wondermom Wondermom
Quote:
Originally posted by Kake aka PoeticErotica
To be honest, I wouldn't bother. I hate the damn thing. Go with the largest or second largest fairy instead. It's like 70s bush vs. '10s bush. Or porn. Or parties. Etc.
yeah, the fairy is cheaper too...
06/29/2011
Jul!a Jul!a
Quote:
Originally posted by sexyintexas
Noted...I have a sister that I explain things I get to on the phone. Maybe I should note some of the things that I tell her too. She lives out of town and doesn't have a camera phone...sheesh...so it gets pretty descriptive.
I've given that advice to a few reviewers, and one of them I know gives it to other people too, lol.
06/29/2011
Kake aka PoeticErotica Kake aka PoeticErotica
Quote:
Originally posted by cherryredhead88
Same here! And now I notice them everywhere.

I don't even recall learning about those in my english classes either.

I still get a little bit confused but I try and incorporate them more now that I know what they are for. ... More
I'm an english major and I scored a 750 on the verbal SATs. I've NEVER learned that in secondary or higher education. NEVER.
06/29/2011
sexyintexas sexyintexas
Quote:
Originally posted by Alan & Michele
Yes, EF appreciates it very much if we do that.
Thanks, I only wonder because some things that I have gotten have been off by quite a bit. It hasn't worked against anything so far but it may for some people.
06/29/2011
Antipova Antipova
Quote:
Originally posted by cherryredhead88
Alright we are doing good! Everyone has awesome suggestions so far I'm sure most of you are looking forward to finding ways to overcome that pesky Writer's Block, and OWL has another great resource with ideas! ... More
These are all really good.

Another one that's Eden-specific:

Symptom: Any of the above

Possible cures: Test the toy again!
06/29/2011
Jul!a Jul!a
Quote:
Originally posted by cherryredhead88
Alright we are doing good! Everyone has awesome suggestions so far I'm sure most of you are looking forward to finding ways to overcome that pesky Writer's Block, and OWL has another great resource with ideas! ... More
Those are great suggestions!
06/29/2011
Kake aka PoeticErotica Kake aka PoeticErotica
Quote:
Originally posted by Jul!a
At this point, I've got a really good idea of what I want to cover in each of my reviews, but that's come with the practice of writing so many. I have a little template in my head that goes over materials, flexibility, compatibility with ... More
Niiiice. Care to send me a copy of said template? I KID! I KID! That's an excellent idea though.
06/29/2011
cherryredhead88 cherryredhead88
Quote:
Originally posted by sexyintexas
I have a question on the information page. If we recieve a product that is largely different from the info page (size, shape, etc.) do we need to submit a ticket or something?
It is suggested to submit a support ticket, yes. You can also email JR or message him on here to get it changed. I typically do that along with adding it to my review.

They probably have a hard time keeping up with so many products!
06/29/2011
sexyintexas sexyintexas
Quote:
Originally posted by cherryredhead88
Alright we are doing good! Everyone has awesome suggestions so far I'm sure most of you are looking forward to finding ways to overcome that pesky Writer's Block, and OWL has another great resource with ideas! ... More
I turn on the radio and do my dishes or mop the floor. By the time I am done I usually have a pretty good idea where I want to start.
06/29/2011
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