I Published my first article, any advice?!

I Published my first article, any advice?!

burtnuh burtnuh
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There is my first article, and advice on it? Maybe ways to improve, or things you did and didn't like about it? I'm always looking for feedback, thanks guys!
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burtnuh burtnuh
It might help if my phone didn't add crazy letters to the title. ha. *first *any
11/30/2012
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