#EdenLit - (07.2012) - Poetry - Two Truths and A Lie

#EdenLit - (07.2012) - Poetry - Two Truths and A Lie

Cedarlooman Cedarlooman
Somehow I found another the idea for another one. It is disjointed free-form, no set syllable pattern or iambic pentameter. Just somehow came out to be 6 stanzas of 6 lines each, so there is at least a little symmetry. Please, make sure you leave some comments--love it, hate it, "meh it". You don't have to be gentle, but be honest.

Two Truths and a Lie

You know that game.
Everyone does,
It’s an icebreaker to get to know someone
At the beginning.
And I know this is the end,
But I have two truths and a lie.

I love you.
I hate you.
You ruined my life.
Can you see the truths,
Discover the lie?
It should be obvious.

I love you.
I did and do, not L-O-V-E,
But in my own weird and wonderful way.
You did too, but I think you lie to yourself
And say you really didn’t to make it easier
To do what you think you need to do.

I hate you.
Well, what happened to you, anyway
And what it has done to your life
And relationships, how your trust is gone.
And how you think I can't want to be there for you,
Though I will be there always.

You ruined my life;
Completely destroyed it,
Wiped it out.
And in its place is the realization that that was not the real me.
It was a piece of a whole that I didn’t even realize wasn’t there.
That discovery allowed me to truly start living my life.

Do you see it now?
Do you see the truths?
Do you see the lie?
I am sure you do:
They are all truths,
They are all lies.
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Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
Meh? As if! Good lord man are you channeling my life? WOW. This truly is a piece to evoke and twist the heart strings even if it is all completely fictional. I suspect it isn't (?)

I only saw one point that made me have to go back and read again to get the full meaning. "You did too, but I think you lie to yourself And say you really didn’t to make it easier" But I can see why it is written that way and really having to go back and read a poem again is the whole darn point of poetry so it's cool.

I love free form poetry, so if you suddenly get the drive to write more for us I will be the one standing in the front row snapping wildly (I'll have a bored and jaded look on my face...for effect, you understand!)
Izzaba Izzaba
That was very good. Free flowing is cool and a makes it easyer get in to at least for me. A lot of people are like that in maney ways they say one thing and then do another.
Woman China Woman China
Ohhhh free form!!!!

Quite lovely the jump I say!!!
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